[AGA-mcm] proofing of booklet

[Erik Olson <erik@thekrib.com>]

If we're going to be pro, might as well do a proofing run, right?


p2., 3rd line, need comma after "howerver"

p2., photo credit.  Shouldn't it be rotated out of the picture like the 
one on page 3?

p3, last sentence in 2nd paragraph, "this is the basics" seems awkward, 
shouldn't "the basics" either be quoted or the phrase be "these are the 
basics".

p4, photo credit.  Rotate out of picture?

p5., first paragraph "the importance of providing THEM" -- the word "them" 
seems awkward to me.

p.5, third paragraph, "In a tank WITH supplemental CO2".  Emphasize 
"with"?  Might help distinguish between the with and without case.  Also, 
put comma: "you have added, causing a loss."

p6. CO2 table doesn't have a title, nor is it indicated that the table 
values are CO2 content in ppm.

p6. Do-It-Yourself paragraph: "It's advantages are that its very cheap," 
(should be "it's").

p7., first Compressed CO2 paragraph, last sentence, "Sometimes however CO2 
can build up..." should probably have commas "Sometimes, however, CO2 can 
..."

p.7. Compressed, 2nd paragraph.  semicolon "levels; the manual and" should 
be a colon.

p.7, last paragraph, "First, during the day so much CO2..." comma after 
"day" ?

p8. first paragraph (partial): "In recent times, single unit regulator, 
solenoid, and needle valve combinations have been available at a 
reasonable price."  (I added a comma and changed tense).

p9., last paragraph, "Sunlight" should be lower case (or earlier 
"sunlight"  on the page should be capitalized).

p10.  That picture looks blurry compared to the others.  I can supply a 
better crypt pic if that's the case.

p10. "Cryptocoryne are known as low light plants" -> "Cryptocoryne species 
are known as low light plants".

p11/ "Obviously the more mirror-like the better."  -> "Obviously, the more 
mirror-like, the better."

p13. "some people love `em" -> change back-quote to forward quote.

p.13. "The raional was" -> "The rationale was"

p.14 - Rotate caption like the others?

Are elements supposed to be capitalized, i.e., Nitrogen, Phosphorus, 
Potassium ?  Earlier, he captitalizes Carbon and Oxygen.  But pp.13-14 on 
nutrients, elements are kept lower case.

p.15, Fertilator not quoted in 2nd to last paragraph, where it is in the 
top of the page.

OK, that's it!

  - Erik

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Erik Olson
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