Quick note. Ask Ben for one last edit to eliminate unnecessary words. A tedious but important task. This is not a criticism on Ben's piece -- it's a general coment -- I haven't seen a piece of writing yet that couldn't be put through one additional wash to replace adjectival prepositons with one-word adjectives, etc. to reduce the word count. Also make the langauge more powerful, more punch per period.
That was my thought, too, when I read it. I don't know if there's time before ACA, but I think it definitely could be improved by a thorough edit before we do a mass production run. Again, not to put down what Ben has done... it's great. But we could help him make it even better.
Send back and ask Amano for one last edit-wash ... whoops, can't do that with him, can we?
Boy, I'd love to. But _I'm_ not gonna tell him that... are you!<g> BTW, I _do_ change some of them, but only those that make very little sense in English.
Karen
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